Here are the corrections and explanations for last week’s entries.
Find and correct the error in the following sentence.
“Lockyer said he put a call into Stiers Wednesday upon learning of the appeal court’s decision, but had not yet spoken to him.”
How on earth does one put a call into another? Is that like stabbing him? The words are out of order and “into” must be changed to “in”.
The comma is unnecessary because the subject of each clause is the same.
“Lockyer said he put in a call to Stiers Wednesday upon learning of the appeal court’s decision but had not yet spoken to him.”
Identify and correct the error in the following piece.
(This is a reference to the Red Bull Races to be held in Windsor the next day.)
“It’s amazing the amount of people involved in this event.”
“People” cannot be considered in amounts; they are considered in terms of numbers.
“It’s amazing the number of people involved in this event.”
“Wangle”, a verb, means to achieve something be means of trickery.
“I tried to wangle a better grade by giving the teacher a bottle of wine.”
“Wrangle”, a verb, means to argue with another.
“We wrangled all night to obtain exactly the correct wording of the brief we wanted to present in the morning.
Find and correct the errors ion the following pieces.
“The attempted murder convictions relate to the wounding of Logan Pigalak and Antoinette Bernhardt, who he shot during the same incident.”
“He” is incorrect because it is subjective and the objective case is needed after “shot”.
“The attempted murder convictions relate to the wounding of Logan Pigalak and Antoinette Bernhardt, whom he shot during the same incident.”
“Wailing teachers, angry nurses, sullen bureaucrats.”
This is not a complete thought because it has no verb.
It should have “and” instead of a comma before “sullen”.
“A one point reduction in the HST would result in wailing teachers, angry nurses and sullen bureaucrats.”
“And the higher the counter on that petition will climb.”
This, also, is not a complete thought. Actually, if read carefully, it doesn’t even make sense and should be reworded.
“The more the Liberals defend the HST the higher the counter on the petition will climb against them at election time.” (This may not be any good but it is more intelligible.)
Identify and correct the errors in each of the following excerpts.
“But you have to do it right, here are a few examples.”
This has what is commonly called a comma splice where a comma is used in a place where a period should be used.
“But you have to do it right. Here are a few examples.”
“An employer needs to know that you will represent their company well and that begins with how you dress.”
“Employer” is singular, so why is the employer’s company referred to as “their”, which is plural? This is basic consistency.
“An employer needs to know that you will represent his (“Her” if you need to have a feminine employer.) company well and that begins with how you dress.”
“Remember the goal of applying in person is to actually speak with the manager and impress them.”
This is the same error as in the previous example; “manager” is singular; so how does he suddenly become “them”? It is illogical and incorrect.
“Remember the goal of applying in person is to actually speak with the manager and impress him.”
BONUS: correctly identify the irony involving the three entries and receive a gold star.
Jennifer Rallis, the author of the quotes, is a recruitment consultant who purports to teach people the correct ways of seeking a job; the irony is that she forgot that correct writing is an essential ingredient of making oneself more marketable. If I were doing the hiring, her application would be the first to be rejected.
A GOOD CONCEPT TO ADOPT
“Truth is the secret of eloquence and of virtue, the basis of moral authority; it is the highest summit of art and life.”
Henri-Frédéric Amiel, a Swiss philosopher, poet and critic who lived from 1821 to 1881, said this.
LAST WEEK’S WORDS
“Provenance” (n.) refers to the birth of something, the cradle of an idea or the origin.
“Plagiarism” (n.) refers to the taking or copying of someone’s words or ideas and claiming them as one’s own. It is piracy or theft.
“Plagiarize” is the verb form.
“Plagiarist” is a noun form of one doing the piracy.
“Scion” (n.) refers to a daughter, a descendent or a shoot cut for planting.
“Internecine” (adj.) means mutually ruinous, characterized by bleeding or conflict within a group, as in an internecine feud among cousins.
“Panegyric” (n.) refers to a praising, a paean, an oration or a eulogy.
“Panegyrist” is the noun form of one doing the praising.
“Panegyrical” is the adjective form.
“Panegyrize” is the verb form.