Here are the corrections and explanations for last week’s entries
Correct the errors in the following piece.
“Our area would receive more notice from the reigning party which equals more money for us. Let’s not shoot ourselves in the foot again and vote the right party in.”
The last sentence is confusing because it suggests that voting the right party into office is akin to shooting oneself in the foot, which is really spupid and dangerous. The clauses should be reversed to improve it, or a comma could be inserted after “again”.
“Our area would receive more notice from the reigning party which equals more money for us. Let’s vote the right party in and not shoot ourselves in the foot again.”
“Drastic” means severe and usually ha s frightening or negative overtones. Drastic measures are extreme and likely have harmful side-effects.
“The weather was so drastic the water pipes cracked and burst like plastic straws.”
“Dramatic” means exciting, sudden, theatrical and striking.
“The race to the finish line was dramatic and emotionally exhilarating.”
THE FIRST ENTRY – April 6, 2007
LET US RAISE OUR SIGHTS
What is the mistake in the following sentence?
“I should have went to the store yesterday but I was too lazy.”
“Went” is incorrectly used; the past participle of the verb “to go” is needed.
“I should have gone to the store yesterday but I was too lazy.”
Identify and correct the writing errors in the following pieces.
“Put another way, of the 169,532 people eligible to vote in Windsor, 86,992 didn’t last time. More than half the city doesn’t bother.”
The tenses are a mix of present and past and should be consistent throughout.
“Put another way, of the 169,532 people eligible to vote in Windsor, 86,992 didn’t last time. More than half the city didn’t bother.”
“Nearly one million votes was impressive for the upstart environmental party. But real world? Only four percent of the Canadian electorate votes green. One person out of 25 eligible.”
“But real world?” is not a complete thought.
“One person out of 25 eligible,” is not a complete thought.
The whole thing needs to be reworked and correct punctuation inserted.
The tenses need to be kept consistent.
“Nearly one million votes was impressive for the upstart environmental party, but in the real world only four percent of the Canadian electorate voted green, even though one person out of 25 was eligible.”
Economic” is an adjective meaning related to business, commerce, industry and the creation of wealth.
“The government’s economic policy needs further scrutiny if they want it to get my vote.”
“Economical” is an adjective meaning businesslike, methodical, frugal and efficient.
DO NOT MISINTERPRET THIS
“It is better to die on your feet than live on your knees.”
Emiliano Zapata (Salazar), a Mexican general who lived from 1879 to 1919 and who was a leading figure in the Mexican Revolution of 1910, wrote this.
LAST WEEK’S WORDS
“Riposte” (n.) refers to a quick, clever reply to an insult or criticism. As a verb, it means making a quick clever reply to an insult or criticism.
“In the debate, his rebuttal to the accusation of his opponent was a biting riposte challenging his opponent’s sanity.”
“Missive” (n.) refers to a written message or text addressed to a person or organization.
“His missive to the light of his life was full of compliments and loving comparisons.”
“Desultory” (adj.) means disconnected, lacking orderly continuity, disjointed or illogical.
“His desultory speech patterns suggested he had been visiting the bar too often.”
“Rascality” (n.) refers to naughtiness, roguishness, dishonesty or reckless or malicious behaviour.
“Rascal” is the noun form for a base, dishonest person.
“Rascally” is the adjective form.
“Puck’s rascality was not really dishonest; he was just having fun at the expense of others.”
“Epiphany” (n.) refers to a divine manifestation or a moment of sudden and great revelation or realization.
BONUS: The “Epiphany” is a Christian Feast Day celebrating the manifestation of Christ to the gentiles on January 6, twelve days after Christmas.
“The self-proclaimed prophet claimed to have an epiphany every Saturday which inspired his oration every Sunday morning.”
“Volition” “n.) refers to the capability of conscious choice, will or the act of making a choice.
“The criminal confessed to his crime of his own volition and spared the state the cost of a trial.”